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Detective stories

2024-01-30 14:29謝建民宗怡帆
初中生世界·九年級 2023年12期
關鍵詞:謎團感染力點題

謝建民 宗怡帆

Sherlock Holmes is one of the most famous detectives in the world. In this story, Holmes meets his greatest enemy, Professor Moriarty.

Holmes was worried because he knew that Professor Moriarty wanted to kill him. He told Dr. Watson to meet him at the railway station the next day for a journey.

The next day, when Watson arrived at the railway station, he could not see Holmes. Watson decided to get on the train and the only other person in his carriage was an old priest. The priest took off his hat and Watson realized he was Holmes in disguise(偽裝).

Moriarty had not been fooled. He had followed Watson instead of Holmes. Luckily for Holmes, Moriarty was not quick enough to catch the train, but Holmes knew that his enemy would soon follow.

Holmes and Waston left England and escaped(逃脫) to Switzerland. There, they heard the good news that Moriartys gang(一伙) had been arrested in England. However, they were disappointed to hear that Moriarty had escaped.

In Switzerland, Holmes and Watson took a walk to the famous Reichenbach Falls. A boy gave Watson a note, saying that an English woman staying nearby was very ill and needed a doctor. So Watson went to treat the woman.

There was no sick woman. Watson had been tricked by Moriarty who wanted to get Holmes on his own. Watson rushed back to the Falls. He found a note from Holmes saying that he was going to fight against Moriarty. He knew that the note was another trick. Watson saw two sets of footprints leading to the edge of the Falls. There were signs that a violent struggle had taken place.

What information did the signs that Watson found in the end bring to him? (不超過6個詞)

上周你們小區發生了一起神秘事件,引起了人們的恐慌,但最終這個謎團被解開。假如你是學?!队⒄Z報》的一名記者,請根據下面的要點和要求,以“A mystery in the neighborhood”為題,敘述一起這個事件。內容應包括:謎團是什么?謎團最終是怎么被解開的?你的感受是什么?

A mystery in the neighborhood

Last week, there was a mystery in the neighborhood. My neighbors often heard strange noises at night. They wanted to find out the cause.

Some people thought that the noises came from the wind while others didnt think so. At last, the police found that three monkeys came to the neighborhood. The workers from the zoo searched for them and finally found them under a big tree in our neighborhood.

Now people in the neighborhood feel relaxed again. I hope that there will be no noise in our neighborhood.

開篇點題,可適當使用形容詞對人們的感受進行描述,使敘述更細膩,增強文章感染力。

原因推測不宜只從一方面來敘述,可以把社區不同人的推測表現出來,體現創新思維。

小作者的感受可再描寫得更豐富一些。

A mystery in the neighborhood

Last week, a strange thing happened in our quiet neighborhood. My neighbors were frequently disturbed by strange noises at night. They did not know where the noises came from, and felt uneasy.

Some people thought that the noises came from the wind, some believed that they must have been made by some naughty children playing tricks, and others supposed that they were likely to be produced by thieves. With the help of the police, we now know that three monkeys ran away from the local zoo and came to our neighborhood. The workers from the zoo searched for them and finally found them hiding beneath a big tree.

Now people in the neighborhood feel relaxed again. I hope that our life will go on with its peaceful rhythm as usual.

本篇書面表達包含所有要點,開篇點題,中間描述情節,結尾扣題并表達感想,結構合理,層次分明。小作者能夠對周圍的情況和事物進行合理推測,文中用some people, some, and others把社區不同人的推測表現出來,邏輯清晰,環環相扣。文章多次使用賓語從句,表達清晰。升格后的文章用詞更為考究,如使用feel uneasy, play tricks, be produced, as usual等,增強了感染力。

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